In every town there is a hero. This is the story of the bumble bee kid. It is a quite day outside. Jonny, a seven year old boy from New York City, is on a casual stroll with his mother in City Park. Jonny and his mother are settling down to have a nice lunch. While eating he notices a bumble bee flying around his sandwich. He swats it but it become angry and attempts to sting Jonny. The bumble stings him right in the arm. The boy cries in pain as he see the bee fly away. Instantly the boys mother runs to his aid. The bee sting has turned very red and does not look too good.
Jonny and his mother decide to cut lunch short and return home. That night Jonny could not stop rolling around in his bed. He is having trouble sleeping and is having crazy dreams. He dreams that his English teacher is completely putting him down and calling his shirt stupid. The teacher calls his shirt stupid and makes fun of him in front of the class. He also dreams of books and of theme. Jonny wakes up in a sweat. He gets out of bed and sees his muscles have grown. He cannot believe his eyes. He also has a giant set of wings. He goes to his window and flies to school.
As he goes through school he notices he has super human powers. He has turned into a half bee half man hybrid. He is like spider man but a bee. As he’s walking down the hall he sees the meanest bully in school. He walks up to Jonny and starts to bully him. The Bully throws a punch at Jonny. Jonny dodges and throws a punch back. The bully flies back twenty feet. Jonny had just beat the toughest bully in school. He then realizes he has to use his powers for good and not evil. He runs home and starts to design a costume. He knows he has to protect this city. He suddenly realizes that this story is a rip off of spider man.
The End
i really like how you linked this very interesting and detailed story to our school. it is very clever. i like how your create your works of literature by just writing what you imagine in your head, and then without doubt or revision you write it on the paper. very inspiring
ReplyDeleteI like this because it is actually entertaining and one doesnt want to stop reading once they get to the bee sting. I love how the dream had nothing to do with bees and also love the end that its a rip off of spiderman
ReplyDeleteI love the lack of creativity and all of the simple sentences in this story. This second story is just as good, if not better than you previous story. I love the summarization of this because it is so short. I feel as though everything is detailed perfectly and I am left with no question to ask. Great job, keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI love this story. As simple as it is, it was actually really hilarious and, of course, had a good message. I also love the references to Spiderman (one of my favorite super heroes). In the end, I was actually expecting the "bumble bee kid" to go back to the school and beat up the teacher for laughing at his shirt, but I guess that might lower your grade... Great work!
ReplyDeleteInteresting story. Somehow, Beeman doesn't have the same zing as Spiderman (pun half-intended). That English teacher sounds wicked mean. I think the moral of the story is clear: if you are being picked on, the best thing to do is to get stung by a bee, because you will instantly turn into a superhero with superhuman strength. It's genius.
ReplyDeletei lied. i hate this story
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